Receiving Notes and Making Changes

What is a note you may ask? Notes are feedback given whenever your script is read. I have many, many notes on The Vortex now and take each one to heart, thinking how and if they could make the script better…because while they are extremely valuable, they are also one person’s opinion…unless you get the same note from multiple people!

That happened last week.

A few months ago I received a note about The Vortex’s title – it was too ‘sci fi’ and didn’t let readers know it was going to be a family fantasy/adventure. I thought about it then and when no new titles came to mind immediately, I chose to ignore it…until I received nearly the exact same note from someone else.

Since I’m taking that rewrite class, I tossed it out to the instructor. He suggested I come up with a dozen or so potential titles (good, bad, and ugly) for us to discuss – surprisingly both he and his intern blindly chose the same one.

So what is the NEW working title? Drum roll please…


The theory behind it is that not only does it show the kids going (worlds away) to the strangeness at their aunt and uncle’s place – but hints at the other worlds as well (Swampy, the land of Mer, fairy realm, etc).

I’d love to hear your thoughts!

About Heather Hamel

Growing up with horses is a little girls dream come true. Heather’s dream in life was to be a horse trainer - how dreams change - sort of! She moved to the wonderfully historic town of St. Augustine, Florida and was a historic tour guide and a ghost story teller while putting herself through college to become a special education teacher. After graduating, she felt the pull of horses in her life again. That's when she met Kobi! She learned quickly that when you own horses you become a part time vet, part time nutritionist, and full time equestrian. She wouldn't change a thing! In addition to being completely obsessed with her herd, she still teaches and tutors students with learning disabilities, and more specifically, dyslexia.
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2 Responses to Receiving Notes and Making Changes

  1. Roy Gulick says:

    I like it.  A lot.  🙂  

  2. Thank you – we’ll see if it generates more interest!!

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